The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist's work after five years.

The chart below shows what anthropology graduates from one university did after finishing their undergraduate degree course. The table shows the salaries of the anthropologist's work after five years.
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The given bar chart compares
diffrent
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different
types of study and
work
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which
anthrologists
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anthropologists
start after graduating from one university. Meanwhile, the table presents the percentages of salaries from anthropology in three different sectors of jobs after 5 years from their
begining
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beginning
.
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, it was evident that
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half of these were employed as
a
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full-time workers,
whereas
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having part-time
work
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along with
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a master's degree was the least selected choice.
furthermore
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, the types of employment that earned the highest income were freelance consultants and
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government
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sector. Taking a closer look at the past that anthropology had taken the most was a full-time worker. It held
a
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largest share, which was exactly 52%.
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by part-time
work
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took
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second place (15%) and the third-ranked was unemployed (12%). The other three groups, which were full-time postgrad study, not known, and part-time
work
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with postgrad study illustrated a few
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which lower than 15%. Turning to the table, the highest earning between 25,000-49,999 and 50,000-74,999 was
private
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company. It yielded
at
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10% and 35% respectively. Between 75,000-99,999, freelance consultants appeared to have
highest
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income in
this
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range. It stood at 40%
whereas
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government
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sector was equal to 30%. At $100,00 and above,
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government
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sector was listed to get
highest
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money, which was 50%,
meanwhile
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freelance consultants were less than
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government
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the government
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by 10% and private companies by 20%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
Vocabulary: Replace the words work, government with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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