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Some people think that environmental problems should be solved on a global scale while ohers beilieve it is better to deal with them ntionlly. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#people #scale #ohers #beilieve
There has been much
policy
 advocacy related to how environmental matters must be curtailed. It is often argued
by
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some
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that all environmental issues should be resolved across
one
country
. Meanwhile, others argue that worldwide action is vitally important for its solution.
This
 essay will explore both
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sides of the argument before reaching a logical opinion. On the
one
 hand, the supporters of the view state that a
country
 should come up with a
policy
 of its own to counter
one
 main factor which is compromising its environment. As each
country
 has a different dilemma in causing environmental deleterious changes. Take
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 example of Brazil and Corita, deforestation of Amazon Forests in Brazil led to huge
environment
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 damage
while
 limited recycling of waste products resulted in clogged rivers causing massive water pollution in Corita.
Hence
, specific problems relevant to an area should be handled by its authorities.
While
on the other hand
, advocates of the global plan suggest that environmental hazards must be discussed
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United
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Nation
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 conference and
one
policy
 should be implemented in all the countries to abide by.
For instance
,
campaign
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 like ‘Green Mother Earth’ was launched by KSA
in
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OIC
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 conference and is now being benefited and followed by all
middle
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 east countries.
Thus
, it is highly likely that imposing
such
policy
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 worldwide could lessen the catastrophes of
environment
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. To
sum-up
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, even though global campaigns and
national level
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 tailored
polices
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 might be the essential solutions. I believe that raising environmental complications should be handled by each
country
 individually as
this
 could target the root cause in a
favorable
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 way.
Additionally
, it would lead to useful ideas and motivation for other countries to do so.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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