The job market today is very competitive and it is best to choose a career or field of study early in order to get a good job later in life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is a known fact, that finding a good

job

has become,

undoubetdly

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undoubtedly

, a challenging task, since there are many candidates and the competition is almost

immpossible

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impossible

among

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today's

job

seekers market. That's why some feel that it is wise to select a career path or study

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an early stage, which will assure

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such

acheivements

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achievements

achievement

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a later stage in life. In

this

essay

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I will

ellaborate

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elaborate

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thesis and will explain why I

storngly

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strongly

agree with

this

view. Finding a

job

today is hard, but finding a good

job

, with a good salary and good conditions is like finding a unicorn, which basically means, it is a rare case.

This

is why I believe it is very important to be

carrer

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career

oriented even

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childhood. In Melbourne

for example

, in primary schools, kids are experiencing lessons that will help them develop skills and knowledge as they grow up, as part of those lessons, they are being presented with different kinds of subjects, including math,

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engineering

, economics, cooking, electricity and science, to expose and help them open up towards finding their field of interest,

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focus

and gain experience which will probably

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serve them at a later point.

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the

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contrast, there will always be people that will have difficulties understanding what they want to do when they grow up. those people have a

tendcy

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tendency

, to go and study subjects that do not have any

opportunaties

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opportunities

in finding work, subjects

such

as literature, history,

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, philosophy and more which are fading out in the current decade. The main problem

occur

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when they graduate and get stuck without an income but with a

profession

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they can't use. Usually, they will need to start over and find something new or popular, but they have spent

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much time and got left

ehind

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behind

while

others, gained experience and will be

prefered

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preferred

by an employer searching for an employee. An

overall

solution

for

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this

problem will be to remove all those professions from the educational system,

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in England, the educational minister change those

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subject

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to receive only a diploma, unlike ten years ago, when one could graduate with a degree, to increase people to go study a subject that can help them after. In conclusion, it is always hard to find a

job

, but it is even harder to select the correct profession that will have the right

benfits

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benefits

and the desired career development. I agree that in order to face those issues, understanding the path you want to take in life, will have to be in an early stage, so it would

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create the best outcome.

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firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

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Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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441 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

You recently purchased an item from a local store, but you are not satisfied with your purchase. Write a letter to the manager of the store. In your letter: Describe the item you bought and why you need it. Explain why you are not happy with it. Say what you would like the manager to do.

Some people think that secondary school children should study international news as one of school subjects. Other people think that it is a waste of valuable school time. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Describe a process of geothermal power plant ? What is the diagram of? How many steps are there? What happens in each step? What are the components, or parts of the process? Is the process mechanical or natural, or both? Where does the process start? Where does it finish?