The job market today is very competitive and it is best to choose a career or field of study early in order to get a good job later in life. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is a known fact, that finding a good
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has become,
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undoubtedly
, a challenging task, since there are many candidates and the competition is almost
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today's
job
seekers market. That's why some feel that it is wise to select a career path or study
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an early stage, which will assure
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such
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a later stage in life. In
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I will
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thesis and will explain why I
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strongly
agree with
this
view. Finding a
job
today is hard, but finding a good
job
, with a good salary and good conditions is like finding a unicorn, which basically means, it is a rare case.
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is why I believe it is very important to be
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career
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childhood. In Melbourne
for example
, in primary schools, kids are experiencing lessons that will help them develop skills and knowledge as they grow up, as part of those lessons, they are being presented with different kinds of subjects, including math,
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engineering
, economics, cooking, electricity and science, to expose and help them open up towards finding their field of interest,
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focus
and gain experience which will probably
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serve them at a later point.
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contrast, there will always be people that will have difficulties understanding what they want to do when they grow up. those people have a
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tendency
, to go and study subjects that do not have any
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opportunities
in finding work, subjects
such
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, philosophy and more which are fading out in the current decade. The main problem
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when they graduate and get stuck without an income but with a
profession
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they can't use. Usually, they will need to start over and find something new or popular, but they have spent
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much time and got left
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behind
,
while
others, gained experience and will be
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preferred
by an employer searching for an employee. An
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this
problem will be to remove all those professions from the educational system,
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to receive only a diploma, unlike ten years ago, when one could graduate with a degree, to increase people to go study a subject that can help them after. In conclusion, it is always hard to find a
job
, but it is even harder to select the correct profession that will have the right
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benefits
and the desired career development. I agree that in order to face those issues, understanding the path you want to take in life, will have to be in an early stage, so it would
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create the best outcome.
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