Many countries invest money to prepare competitors to join top competitions, the Olympics or the World Cup. Therefore, it is necessary to offer money to encourage children to exercise more? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays many countries
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in investing in
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sport
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industry. Because of the popular
sports
program like the Olympics and the World Cup. There have many
policies
and
money
supports to build young athletes to compete on the global stage. In the following paragraphs, my point of view on
this
topic will be described. It is obvious that doing exercise will give people
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good discipline
such
as doing a thing on time, multi-tasking and time management skill which I personally think
this
is a crucial skills to survive in the competitive world.
Moreover
, having a good health population is a source of qualities
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which will enroll in many industries and help to develop a country. It seems to me that investing in
sports
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industry is an interesting way to gain income and create a healthy community. Government should encourage children to play
sports
or do exercises by supporting
money
, building
the
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sports
infrastructures and providing good
policies
to enhance people to have a healthy lifestyle.
In addition
, competitors should have a good quality of life and convenient life to develop the best performance on the global stage. It seems to me that
money
support is not enough but having good
policies
to support athletes and providing accessible exercise facilities is essential. In conclusion, doing exercise give youngsters good health,
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habits and it is a great choice of occupation. So I strongly agree that government should support and invest in
this
sector not only
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but
also
facilities
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and
policies
.
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