Many countries invest money to prepare competitors to join top competitions, the Olympics or the World Cup. Therefore, it is necessary to offer money to encourage children to exercise more? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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in investing in

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industry. Because of the popular

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program like the Olympics and the World Cup. There have many

policies

and

money

supports to build young athletes to compete on the global stage. In the following paragraphs, my point of view on

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topic will be described. It is obvious that doing exercise will give people

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good discipline

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as doing a thing on time, multi-tasking and time management skill which I personally think

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which will enroll in many industries and help to develop a country. It seems to me that investing in

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industry is an interesting way to gain income and create a healthy community. Government should encourage children to play

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sports

infrastructures and providing good

policies

to enhance people to have a healthy lifestyle.

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, competitors should have a good quality of life and convenient life to develop the best performance on the global stage. It seems to me that

money

support is not enough but having good

policies

to support athletes and providing accessible exercise facilities is essential. In conclusion, doing exercise give youngsters good health,

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habits and it is a great choice of occupation. So I strongly agree that government should support and invest in

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sector not only

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but

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facilities

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and

policies

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