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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
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It is often argued by some that an equal number of both
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genders must be given an opportunity to
enroll
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 in a university program.
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 some might agree with
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, I completely disagree. Not only because few subjects are meant for specific
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 and applicants must be judged on potential
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 because the idea is unrealistic practically.
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, there are certain subjects which demand one specific
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 in a course. Take an example of nursing courses, which tend to attract more female applicants and it would be difficult to fill these courses if fifty per cent of the places go to males.
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, numerical
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 equity is not feasible.
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, apart from specific subjects, the criteria to judge a student should be based on merit. In
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, in a globally recognized university
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, in a program called musical art, there are 200 aplicaticants out of which 60% are male. If the criteria
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equal
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 number of genders,
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 the concept of merit is sacrificed.
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, student numbers on any course depend on the applications that the institution receives. If a university decides to fill courses with equal numbers of males and females, it would need enough applicants of each
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 which is practically not possible. To
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, I believe that an unequal number of students would result in greater opportunities for a choice of subject course and
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 an organized education system
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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