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University education should be free to everyone, regardless of income. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #education #income
The right to
education
 and the right to higher
education
 especially in accordance with the man’s income always
are
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in
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 the
center
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 of political and
economical
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 debates. Most of the discussions can be divided into two parts. The first part stated that higher
education
 must be free for all because of the role of the
education
 in modern
world
.The second group presume that higher
education
 is not compulsory for everyone and
as a result
 must not be free for all. As for me, I feel
myself
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somewhere in the middle between mentioned points above but to be true closer to the second one.
People
 have to pay for high
education
 for several reasons. The first reason is that today international law provides the rule that higher
education
 must be affordable but not free of charge.
For example
,
government
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 can regulate
universities
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university
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 fees by providing grants and stipends in order to make higher
education
 more affordable. As we know almost every university or college has
such
 instruments.
Moreover
as
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for me market rules in
educational
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 business provides concurrence and better labour quality
as a result
. The opposite point refers to the theory of formal equality, which means that all
people
 must have
the
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 equal possibility to get social benefits. The other reason they mention is that
today
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 capitalistic
world
 is
continuing
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 make the gap between mid and
high income
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high-income
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people
. And
this
 can bring us to
the
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world
 where higher
education
 will be a benefit of a small group of elite
people
. History shows us that even when we have thousands of universities all over the
world
 we still can define
top ranked
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 among them. And that rank didn’t change for not even a tenth of years but centuries. As I pointed
above
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 I do not a big fan of free higher
education
 but as a human
bean
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i
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 do understand that mankind should be on the way
of
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to
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 making higher
education
 affordable for all.
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