Topic – Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, while others believe that students’ attitude are important. Discuss both the views and give your opinion.

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It is often argued by a few masses that educational victory is based on good mentors,
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, others opine that an individual's behaviour is more important.
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, tutors play an important role in the development of students. First of all, individuals learn from their home but after that tutors play a crucial part to make a
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successful. To explain
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, if a
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has a smart
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who can clear his concept easily make him more victorious in every field of
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, if a doctor is become more successful because he learns from a good
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. A good
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develops a successful nation because of his vast knowledge.
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can make a
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a good human being
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a good successful
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, as we know a mentor makes a
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victorious but as well a
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plays an integral part in success. To elaborate
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, if a
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is not serious about his career he can't get a successful
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's attitude matters a lot.
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, if a
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wants to be a good businessman he should pay proper attention to his study.
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, if a
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is not serious about their study
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can't do anything.
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attitudes de both are important to be successful.But if a
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is not serious about his career no one can make his
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victorious
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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