Some people say the government should give healthcare the first priority, some others believe there are more important priorities to spend taxer’s money. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are
citizens
that
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that the taxer's
money
should go especially to the
health
sector,
refering
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referring
that it's the main priority.
Howeber
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However
, there are some people that
belive
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believe
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that are other priorities in where the
money
can go.
Prioritze
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healthcare is a
samrt
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smart
way of spending the taxer's
money
due to
is an
area
crucial to all
citizens
.
Nevertheless
, is a right to get medical help.
Also
, if the government invest more in
this
sector the hospitals, doctors, clinic and more will
better
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.
On the other hand
, giving more
money
to
this
area
it
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will create a healthy population,
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health
is a specific
area
that is
knowm
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known
that with more sources it improves that's why
provate
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private
hospitals are better and it's not fair that because of
money
a life could be at risk. Meanwhile, there are other sectors that have a big importance in each country
such
as
employments
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employment
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,
eductation
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education
, security and others. Spending the taxer's
money
in
this
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these
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areas,
it
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has
it's
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importance
due to
if they aren't
mantain
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maintained
it
create
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consecuances
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consequences
to
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all the population. To
sustaing
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sustain
sustaining
a country all the incomes can't go just to one
area
and
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it is
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relevant to have everything standing.
Nevertheless
, it's
job
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of the
govermment
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government
to
maintan
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maintain
everything crucial to all the
citizens
.
To conclude
, in
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reality
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all the sources that the
govermment
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government
gets it's necessary
to
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the survival of the country and
get
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to get
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the best life possible
to
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all the
citizens
.
Althought
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Although
, I
belive
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believe
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that there are some
factores
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factors
more important than others and
health
care is one of them. I will put
on
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the top of my list to invest in
health
because the first thing that your people need is to stay alive and
a
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healthy life. I
understant
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understand
that
eductation
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education
, security and others are
importat
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important
but you can't give
this
to a population
that is
dying
due to
bad medical services.
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