The range and quality of food that we can buy has changed because of technological and scientific advances. Some people regard this change as an improvement, while others believe that it is harmful. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, modern technology brings a lot of changes in our

world

. The taste and flavours of

food

are changing day by day

due to

the innovation of science and technology.

Moreover

, the rates of fruits and vegetables are increasing around the

world

. In

this

essay, I will look at both these views and give my opinion.

To begin

with, changes in the range and the quality of

food

are very harmful to our country. Nowadays, admixture has been observed in every corner of the

world

For instance

, the milk we got from the milkman is an intermixture of water and some other chemicals.

However

, which are harmful to us and they do not contain enough calcium and vitamins. Our growing generation is too much weak because of the interchanges in

food

sources. Analysing the statement and explaining

further

, some people believed that

this

change escort the improvements.

Therefore

, new flavours of snacks enlarged their size which enhance the taste buds and boost the appetite of youngsters.

For example

, a packet of snacks increased its quantity.

Similarly

this

enhancement expands the sales of superstores.

Furthermore

, I widely acknowledged that the government must take some actions regarding the admixture of

food

resources because intaking pure

food

substances is very important for children.

Moreover

, authorities of the country must visit the factories on a daily basis the check and balance good sources and the Ministry of the

World

has to keep an eye on workers. In conclusion,

according to

the presented information we have to take care of ourselves

while

eating and buying fruits, vegetables and cereals.

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