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Some believe that engaging in an active pastime does more to develop life skills than time spent reading To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view

It is argued that a
child
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 will develop life
skills
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 more effectively when she is allowed to engage in some
pastime
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activities
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 than making her read books. I feel the extent to which these
skills
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 are acquired is based on the
child
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 and her living circumstances. On the one hand, when
children
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 engage in any active
pastime
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, the best part of it is that it keeps their minds absorbed in it. To be precise, unlike adults,
children
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 are keen observers and learners, and their interest in doing
activities
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 like gardening, painting and writing role-play makes them constantly learn.
This
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 type of learning is much more effective than theoretical learning because
children
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 learn a lot of life
skills
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 like problem-solving passively. Even though there are fewer opportunities and time constraints for a modern
child
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 to do
such
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activities
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, if done, most
children
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 like those, and it definitely makes them equipped with some essential
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 the future.
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, one cannot ignore the invaluable benefits for
children
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 when they read. To be clearer, when
children
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 read, the doors of knowledge are opened widely before them, with which they can explore numerous things, which can hardly be seen or experienced in their
real-lifelife
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. When
skills
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 like problem-solving and communication are more effectively learned by doing some
pastime
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activities
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, reading boosts the imagination and creativity of a
child
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 in a better way.
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 reading is possible for a
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 in most circumstances, not many
children
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 are interested in doing so.
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, it is obvious that engaging
children
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 in an active
pastime
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 helps them in developing some life
skills
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. Reading too assists
children
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 to acquire
such
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skills
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, but the level of
this
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 acquisition can be hardly measured as it depends on the interest and the situation in which the
child
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 lives.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Self-discipline
  • Interpersonal skills
  • Kinesthetic learning
  • Cognitive development
  • Empathy
  • Resilience
  • Dexterity
  • Analytical skills
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