The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010

The chart shows the percentage of women and men in one Asian country who passed when they took their driving test between 1980 and 2010
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the given bar chart compares the proportion of females and males in an Asian nation who excelled in their driving exam from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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, it is evident that more
women
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than men passed their driving test throughout the period, both trends increased for some time,
while
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women
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's rate declined
at the end
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male proportion remained stable.
To begin
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, in 2000
women
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's performance perked the graph by approximately 70% which was roughly 20% greater than their counterparts' rate in that year.
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, males performance in driving tests remained constant from 2000 to 2010
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their opponents' proportion dropped slightly to about 65% in 2010.
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,
women
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's percentage stood at around 48% at the beginning of the period which grew to 52% in the following decade, as compared to the men there recorded a low of 28% in 1980 which attracted a significant growth of about 10% in the next ten years.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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