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Some people argue that space exploration has had more to do with national pride than international effort. To what extent do you agree with this? How do you think space exploration will change in the future?

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Space
 can be considered as a location
that is
 not ordinary to certain people but
astronaut
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. It is often argued that international
cooperation
 will strengthen
the
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space
exploration
 and it might experience changes in the future.
However
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 as to whether it is a blessing or curse, there arises a heated debate among people. As far I’m concerned, international
cooperation
 will reduce the expenditure and expedite the
process
while
 the
exploration
 might shift to artificial intelligence in the future.
Firstly
,
space
 explorations are totally different
with
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 other kinds of scientific experiment and it requires
large
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 amount of funding.
Thus
, it is a way much better to have
a
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cooperation
 between countries not just only for the funding but
also
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involved
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 of elites. Meaning to say, professionals from different countries can provide their valuable
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viewpoints
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 to expedite
the
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space
exploration
.
For example
, Nasa always carried out a few conferences yearly with different countries’
space
 engineers to collect more data for the improvement of a specific project. Astronaut often risk their precious life to carry out an experimental
process
in
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a different planets
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a different planet
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. Unfortunately, I strongly believe that artificial intelligence will soon supersede the astronaut’s duty.
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not only will reduce the risk taken by
astronaut
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astronauts
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 but
also
 have the ability to provide
an
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accurate data. AI is considered
as
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a non-living organism which they can withstand
on
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a critical environment in
the
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space
 which human
being
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beings
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 can’t resist on it.
For instance
, it is worth mentioning that Nasa had sent a few monkeys to
the
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Mars during the
exploration
process
 as they carried
a
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relatively similar genetic material
with
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 human
being
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beings
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. In conclusion,
according to
 the examples and arguments given, I strongly agree that
space
exploration
 requires the
cooperation
 from different countries for the well-being of the project itself and the
exploration
process
 will be replaced by artificial intelligence in order to ensure the astronaut’s safety.
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