the pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the us between 1988 and 2000. Summarize the imformations and comparing

the pie charts and table give information about the total value and sources of fish imported to the us between 1988 and 2000. Summarize the imformations and comparing
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The given table and pie charts indicate the total
value
in billions of
dollars
and the
proportion
of 3 countries where
US
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the US
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imported
source
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a source
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of
fishes
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fish
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from 1988 to 2000.
Overall
, the total
value
in billions of
dollars
showed
an
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a
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gradual increase.
Moreover
, the
percantage
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percentage
of imported
fishes
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fish
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from Canada accounted for the largest
proportion
in 1988
while
it was replaced
to
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by
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that of other countries between 1992 and 2000. Looking at the first chart, the amount
value
of
dollars
gradually went up from 6.57 billion to 10.72 billion during 12 years until 2000. The total
value
of
dollars
in 1988 was three-fifths of that in 2000. When it comes to the second one, the
proportion
of sources from Canada comprised the biggest recording 68% in 1988, over half of the pie.
However
, it experienced
constant
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a constant
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decrease throughout the period marking 34% in 1992 and 28% in 2000 respectively.
Instead
, the largest figure was changed into the
percantage
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percentage
of sources from other countries at 45% in 1992 and 42% in 2000 respectively. When it comes to China,
while
its figure was relatively
nigligible
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negligible
compared to the others from 1988 to 1992, the figure showed
an
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a
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constant upward trend and accounted for the second largest
proportion
recording 38% in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words value, dollars, proportion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • import value
  • sources
  • trends
  • contributing countries
  • regions
  • significant changes
  • peaks
  • troughs
  • international trade agreements
  • overfishing
  • import strategies
  • fish industry
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