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some people use socialmedia to keep in touch with others and new events do you think advantages this techniques outweight the dis advantages

#people #socialmedia #touch #events #techniques #outweight #dis
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In recent years, social networks like Facebook and Instagram are more and more popular.
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 helps
people
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 connect to each other without face-to-face
meeting
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. It is agreed that the benefits of social networks outweigh
its
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their
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 drawbacks. In
this
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eassy
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essay
, we will discuss the
convinience
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convenience
 and flexibility of
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apply
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social media to make our life better. On the one hand,
People
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 can really take advantage of communicating with
people
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 from
long
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a long
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 distance and receiving notifications immediately.
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, you can connect and have a chat with your friends in different countries through your smartphone. It is awesome that you can connect to everyone over the world whenever and wherever you want.
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, special events will send notifications to your phone for
invitation
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invitations
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instead
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 of going to the place.
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, It is said that social media is a kind of drug
and
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that
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make
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makes
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people
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 addicted.
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,
people
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 spend so much time talking with their friends and
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 the reason they admit that they can not live without their phone.
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 makes
people
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 less productive and affects their mental health in
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the long-term
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long-term
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long term
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. In conclusion, social media has advantages and disadvantages. But I think the benefits outweigh the drawbacks because it helps
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people
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people's
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 life much easier and better.
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