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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The maps illustrate the changes
of
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 a
city
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 hospital
road
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 between 2007 and 2010.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that a number of major modifications were made to the
city
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 hospital
road
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. These include developing bus
station
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stations
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, public
car
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park
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parks
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 and other supporting facilities. In terms of the first map in 2007,
ring
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the ring
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road
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 was situated on the top of the
city
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 hospital's right
side
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while
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 on the left
side
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 had
hospital
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a hospital
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road
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. The hospital
road
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 was connected to the
city
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road
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 and the bus stops were on
the
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both sides of the hospital
road
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. The hospital
road
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's east
side
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 had
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car
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a car
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park
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 which was for
a
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the
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 staff and
public
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the public
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. In the second and final map in 2010 , two
roundabout
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roundabouts
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 were developed on the north and south sides
in
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of
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 the hospital
road
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whereas
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on
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the west
side
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 of the hospital
road
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 had a bus station which was constructed in 2010. The staff
car
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park
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 was changed and expanded. The
city
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car
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park
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 was connected to the second roundabout. A public
car
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park
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 was established beside the
city
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 hospital which was on the east
side
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, road, car, park, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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