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Some people believe that children should study all subjects at school, while others think they should only study subjects they are good at or find interesting. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People have different views about the
education
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 of
children
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.
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 some people believe that youngsters should learn what they are good at or interested in at their
schools
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, others argue that they have to study all
subjects
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 there. I am of the opinion that the latter is more important. On the one hand, it is better for young students to study only
subjects
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 which can help them vitalize their strength at an early age. People who claim the importance of selecting
subjects
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, which each student prefers, focus on saving time and effort.
Children
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 can set their
career
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 path and concentrate on related skills from
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 a way of
education
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.
For example
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, some countries,
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 as Germany, operate different kinds of
schools
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 to find each student's proper expertise. Some
schools
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 concentrate on practical
career
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education
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 and others provide basic studies which make students apply for a scholar major. In
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 case,
children
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 can deepen their abilities and knowledge without unnecessary waste.
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, teaching all
subjects
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 is essential. In fact, it is hard for
children
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 to find what study is appropriate for them at their age.
Schools
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 can encourage them to discover their preferences themselves by giving various kinds of
education
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.
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,
children
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 may change their major or
career
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 or lose interest in what they have studied during their school lives. In
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 case, the number of different
subjects
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 provided by
schools
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 can help them set new
career
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 plans or give opportunities to discover talents, which they do not recognise. In conclusion,
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 concentrating on interesting
subjects
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 can save
children
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's time and effort to improve their strengths, In my opinion, I think that offering all
subjects
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 is more vital because of their diversity and opportunities to search for new choices.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • well-rounded education
  • discover their interests and strengths
  • basic understanding
  • interconnected world
  • higher motivation
  • deeper knowledge
  • mental health
  • reducing unnecessary stress
  • boredom
  • balanced approach
  • successful specialization
  • well-informed perspective
  • solid general education
  • freedom to delve deeper
  • specialized future career path
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