Eating sweet sustenances produces corrosive in the mouth which can cause tooth rot.

Our

body

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has a complex mechanism, anything in excess is harmful to the

body

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.Having a

sweet-

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sweet tooth

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tooth

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is not to worry about but consuming

sweets

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very often may harm

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tooth

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since they contain many additives which have damaging effects.

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with, people of all

generation

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like to eat

sweets

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. In the process of making

sweets

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, they are added with many

ingreadints

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ingredients

which have

detoriating

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deteriorating

effects on

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allover

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all over

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body

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the body

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and most importantly on

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the tooth

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tooth

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teeth

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making

a chocolate

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, a special syrup is mixed with milk which is the primary reason for

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decay.

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preparing

sweets

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certain synthetic

sweetners

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sweeteners

are sprinkled in order to enhance test of it

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has

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serious

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damaging effect on

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tooth

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, many preservatives are blended with the raw materials

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may lead to serious

consequnces

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consequences

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no of

pateints

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patients

with

tooth

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problems has gradually increased from 25000 to 40000 in

span

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the span

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of just over 3 months

beacuse

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because

of eating more

sweets

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. Another reason for my view is,

preservation

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of sweet food is not done

upto

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up to

the standard which produces certain harmful chemicals in it and

such

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sweet

inturn

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causes

tooth

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decay.

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, in many

villages

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one can find insects sitting

ove

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over

cakes or chocolates

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because

they are kept open.

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this

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, proper hygiene is not maintained in many shops and

that is

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why these products become

non edible

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knowing

this

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fact,many shopkeepers sell them to customers.Eating

such

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unhealthy products can have

life threating

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life-threatening

effect

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effects

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for example

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, in a

marriage

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200 guests fell ill after eating food and later it was found that it was cooked with roasted material

that

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led to

this

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disaster. In conclusion, eating anything

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apply

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limited can not only fit your

body

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but

also

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can keep

one

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away from many diseases. So my advice is

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apply

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that,

sweet

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sweets

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should be eaten

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within

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a certain limit in order to stay healthy.

robinmacwan

Apr 28, 2023

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Eating sweet sustenances produces corrosive in the mouth which can cause tooth rot.

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Some people say that schools should concentrate on teaching students academic subjects that will be useful for their future careers. Other people say that subjects such as music and sports are also necessary. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people think that printed books are no longer needed in the digital era, because all writing can be stored electronically. Others think printed books will still play an important role. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the world’s fuel resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries nowadays, consumers can go to a supermarket and buy food produced all over the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?