The table shows data about the underground railway systems in six major cities with the date opened, kilometers of the route, and passenger numbers per year in millions.

The table shows data about the underground railway systems in six major cities with the date opened, kilometers of the route, and passenger numbers per year in millions.
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graph
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presented it is comparing
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energy
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production
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from 1995 to 2005. the two pie charts represent the
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of material that it is being used on. the
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analyzes a
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difference in
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both gas and coal. The
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shows how neither gas
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production
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percentage
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saw a higher
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than 2%, showing
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its
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consistency through 10 years. Meanwhile, Petro´s
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dropped down significantly, almost marking a 10% difference from 1985 to 2005.
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shows how that 10% was made up, as it can be noticed that
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increase
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of both nuclear and other.
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used
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nuclear and other had very similar trends.
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percentage
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went up by almost 4%,
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saw an increment of slightly more than 4%. Both saw an
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during the 10 years. In conclusion, it can be noticed in the
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the
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yout
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of the 10% drop
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Petro. The most significant
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shown
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that it was other but was not as big
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graph, energy, production, percentage, increase with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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