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Nowadays many people choose to be self- employed rather than to work for a company or organisation .why might this be the case? What could be the advantages and disadvantages of being self-employed?

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In the modern era, a number of humans like to make their own
business
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 rather than work for any other firm. I think it might be because they have a passion for
business
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 and there are some benefits and drawbacks which I mentioned in the following paragraphs. To initiate with,folks nowadays are more aware of their financial position.I mean to say, they would like to be more successful than any job person .
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 ,In India particularly in Gujarat ,state there are nearly 60% of people who admire
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 and they follow
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 until they retire.
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 few failed in self-employed, nearly 50 % were successful in
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.
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, becoming self-employed is not possible for everyone but,those who are passionate about
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 in the end succeeded.
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, individuals who devote their time and a plethora of money might be they are taking losses during the inflation time. They may tackle difficult times, even though they may learn lots of things and experience.
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 , during the corona ,period a whole world number of people started businesses but few get excellent results
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, few face serious circumstances in their life. B
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 ,there are some profits and downsides to selecting to become self-employed but they follow their passion.

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