In some countries, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

For over the
last
two or three decades, the importance of encouragement has been comprehended.
Besides
, motivational
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to teenagers all around the world.
However
, what are the benefits of
this
, and what are the drawbacks? In
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essay, I will look at both sides and try to draw some conclusions. On the one hand, there is an exceedingly increasing amount of
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accomplishment among motivated youngsters.
This
is because
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years are the significant period of time in an individual's life to develop self-confidence so as to believe
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capabilities to achieve things desired.
Besides
, boasting
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sense could lead these smart teenagers to success
accordingly
. As they understand that success does not come
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, it takes blood, sweat and tears. A good example of
this
would be Albert
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Einstein
.
Furthermore
, he had been told to be foolish by school heads but after years he became
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physicist because of his mother's motivation.
As a consequence
, trying hard
as well as
being motivated could open up doors to success.
On the other hand
, a growing number of adolescents have become selfish
due to
the highly imposing
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motivational
words
.
In other
words
, these children are poisoned that they can access everything undoubtedly if they put aside the amount of time and
also
work hard. Unfortunately, failing to approach desirable items gives rise to
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interest
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along with
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depressed
among teens.
For example
, proven by statistics, over 60 per cent
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youngsters are those who regularly are imposed by inspirational
words
.
Additionally
, in some cases, underachievement can expand mental problems which can only be solvable by psychologists.
In addition
, it should be told that hard-working may sometimes
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to failure
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versa.
As a result
, children are expected to face that everything can not be
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even if they try hard. In conclusion,
although
developing motivation among teenagers can have positive aspects
such
as enhancing
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self-confidence
, it has negative sides
such
as becoming selfish. I believe the benefits in terms of personal growth eventually outweigh any negatives.
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