Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Many individuals believe that living in big people do not have the same activities.
In conclusion, living in big
cities
can affect on
our health. From my perspective, to some Change preposition
apply
extent
I agree with these individuals. Add a comma
,extent
However
, there are some advantages of living in a big city
. So, in this
essay
I will Add a comma
,essay
further-examine
Correct your spelling
further examine
this
thought-provoking question.
To begin
with, life in a big city
have
tremendous drawbacks. Change the verb form
has
Firstly
, it is poor air quality. As a matter of the
fact, there Correct article usage
apply
are
a lot of transport apart Change the verb form
is
of
Change preposition
from
it
a lot of plants which emit CO2 and Correct pronoun usage
apply
greenhouses
gases . Change the noun form
greenhouse
Consequently
, because of it many persons
are often tired and they want to have a nap. Replace the word
people
Moreover
, life in a big city
is so dengerous
. Correct your spelling
dangerous
In other
words
there are a lot of thieves who commit crimes every day. Well, Add a comma
,words
random
Correct article usage
a random
individual
can become a victim of one of the crimes. Fix the agreement mistake
individuals
For example
, rubbery or shoplifting. Also
, another problem is noise pollution. Considering various bustling streets and areas your hearing will degrade and in the future
you will have difficulties in observing information.
Add a comma
,future
On the other hand
, we cannot underestimate the benefits of living in big cities
. The first,
advantage is a good medical system. Compared to the outskirts there are individuals do
not have access to Correct pronoun usage
who do
a
good quality treatment. Correct article usage
apply
In contrast
, if you live in a big developed city
you can get this
treatment and be sure of your recovery. Furthermore
, in the big cities
there are many activities where elderly people can spend their time. Add a comma
,cities
For instance
, language clubs, sport
clubs, speaking clubs and so on. Change the noun form
sports
Hence
, they can stop retrogradation
of their brains. Correct article usage
the retrogradation
Although
, in Correct article usage
the countrysides
countrysides
Fix the agreement mistake
countryside
Add a comma
,
cities
can lead to harmful consequences. Nonetheless
, if it is possible to get over all the disadvantages, there will be only the benefits that remain.Submitted by slobodanatol83 on
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