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Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
Many individuals believe that living in big
cities
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 can affect
on
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our health. From my perspective, to some
extent
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 I agree with these individuals.
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, there are some advantages of living in a big
city
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. So, in
this
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essay
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 I will
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further-examine
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this
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 thought-provoking question.
Body paragraph 1
To begin
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 with, life in a big
city
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have
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 tremendous drawbacks.
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, it is poor air quality. As a matter of
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fact, there
are
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 a lot of transport apart
of
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it
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a lot of plants which emit CO2 and
greenhouses
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 gases .
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, because of it many
persons
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people
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 are often tired and they want to have a nap.
Moreover
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, life in a big
city
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 is so
dengerous
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dangerous
.
In other
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words
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 there are a lot of thieves who commit crimes every day. Well,
random
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a random
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individual
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individuals
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 can become a victim of one of the crimes.
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, rubbery or shoplifting.
Also
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, another problem is noise pollution. Considering various bustling streets and areas your hearing will degrade and in the
future
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 you will have difficulties in observing information.
Body paragraph 2
On the other hand
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, we cannot underestimate the benefits of living in big
cities
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. The
first,
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advantage is a good medical system. Compared to the outskirts there are individuals
do
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 not have access to
a
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good quality treatment.
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, if you live in a big developed
city
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 you can get
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 treatment and be sure of your recovery.
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, in the big
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cities
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 there are many activities where elderly people can spend their time.
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, language clubs,
sport
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 clubs, speaking clubs and so on.
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, they can stop
retrogradation
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the retrogradation
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 of their brains.
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, in
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the countrysides
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countrysides
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countryside
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people do not have the same activities.
Conclusion
In conclusion, living in big
cities
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 can lead to harmful consequences.
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, if it is possible to get over all the disadvantages, there will be only the benefits that remain.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban environment
  • respiratory issues
  • pollution
  • fast-paced lifestyle
  • noise pollution
  • health facilities
  • mental health
  • physical activities
  • nature contact
  • health problems
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