"Different types of environment pollution seem to be affecting an increasing number of people in the world. What do you think are the causes of this problem and what solutions would you suggest?"

Nowadays, the most global
problem
is
enviromental
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environmental
pollution. Some individuals argue that
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environmental
pollution can
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lead
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the fact that we faced with terrible
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in the future.
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, in
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I will tell about
causes
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the causes
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and solution of
this
problem
.
To begin
with, our environment
need
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to be clear for
people
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health. If our
world
would be bad for
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, it can
be play
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a role that we can’t live
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the
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Earth.
First
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cause is that
people
are destroy
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our nature
yourself
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themselves
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.
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, in the park we can
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with a lot of rubbish, it is very terrible
to
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our environment, living,
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cause is most of all our
world
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out
a
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gas and coal.
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, every family have
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two or more cars. It can give a big
problem
to
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the future
such
as
to
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our air.
In contrast
. Of
this
huge
problem
, we have many solutions.
Firstly
,
people
should
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a
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care to
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,
such
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a group to improve our ecology.
Secondly
,
government
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needs to include
new
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law that provides information
about
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that
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each
of
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family can buy only one car.
Nevertheless
, one good solution would be to use
a
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electrical
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car,
such
as Tesla, because it’s eco-friendly.
Moreover
, we can see that
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can influence our
problem
,
thus
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generation will
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stay
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clever
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environment.
As a result
, if we will continue to save our
world
, it can give
the
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good
affect
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to
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our
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next generation. Ultimately, in the future amount of
people
can
be
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increase and we need to be safe.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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