In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise their products are new in some way

many
company
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companies
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and the person who sets up a job, show
at
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in
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their
advertisement
that their
products
are fresh. they do
this
work
due to
more sales. I believe that it's an appropriate
way
to develop their business. these days advertising is a brilliant
way
for occupations to demonstrate their
products
to
people
. they advertise on TV or
Internet
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the Internet
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in order to succeed in
market
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the market
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. what is so crucial for a new job, is illustrating that
they
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the
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goods
have high quality and are new. in
these
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this way
these ways
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way
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they can attract customers. because it has a great influence on
people
and they are attracted to
products
which are advertised on social media.
for
example
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after
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the kaleh
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kaleh
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kale
Saleh
dairy
company
have been increasing 20% of their
advertisement
on TV rather than
last
year and
says
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said
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that their
products
are new and fresh, their sales have been doubling.
moreover
not only seeing
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an advertisement
the advertisement
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advertisement
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advertisements
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on TV
is
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a
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an
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accurate
way
for
people
to know
company
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the company
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but
also
it's a
success
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successful
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way
for
company
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the company
a company
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to develop its
goods
and
sales
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sell
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them. we can compare different items and choose the best option among them.
in
addition
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humans can understand
that
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apply
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which
products
are fresh and new. so it's beneficial for both
people
and companies.
for
instance
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Samsung
company
could develop their
products
during
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for
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20 years. They have been building specific
ad
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ads
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and know which
goods
customers want. so they try to build that kind of product. in
conclusion
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advertisement
is
a
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an
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excellent
way
for
company
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the company
a company
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to show their
products
to
people
and
also
it's a positive strategy which
help
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helps
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both companies and
people
to obtain information about new
goods
.
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