People should be at least 21 years old before they are allowed to drive a car. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Nowadays, people have different opinions on whether the youths should be allowed to
drive
a
car
. In my opinion, I strongly believe that children should be at least 21 years old before they are allowed to
drive
.
Firstly
, In today's ,world most teenagers want to show off their wealth and how cool they are to impress others at school. So they
drive
expensive or moderate vehicles without proper training and licence. Parents who are not
giving
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attention to
this
can cause deathly
accidents
.
For example
, recently a 17-year-old boy from Mumbai who belonged to a rich family drove an expensive
car
on the highway and was not able to handle the speed because he
was
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did
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not
having
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have
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professional training for driving as he was underage,
due to
which he crashed into a truck and he suffered from brain injury.
Thus
, if his parents had restricted him from driving a
car
as he was under age
then
this
situation would have been avoided.
Secondly
, most students below the age of 21 do not have the ability to make constructive decisions
while
driving.
This
causes
accidents
and fatal injuries to the children.
For instance
, 'The Times' published
according to
a survey conducted in 2022 that an 87% increase in road
accidents
is
due to
amateur drivers.
Hence
, increase in fatality rates. In conclusion, I strongly adhere to the view that children should be at least 21 years old before
giving
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a
car
to
drive
to avoid death rates and
accidents
.
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