People in all modern societies use drugs, but today's youth are experimenting with both legal and ilegal drugs, and at an early age, some sociologists claim that parents and other members of society often set a bad example. Discuss the cause and effects of widespread drug abuse by young people. Make any recommendations you feel are necessary to help fight youth drug abuse.

Nowadays, there's a problem in our
socitie
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society
societies
due to
there are some
drugs
that are legal and
other's
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others
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don't. In
history
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,history
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there are always been
this
kind of
sustances
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substances
but there
were
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was
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againt
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against
the law. The conflict is that allowing some ,
create
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creates
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an
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apply
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easy
acces
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access
to it,
speccially adolecents
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specifically adolescents
.
Overall
, teenagers have
allways
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always
been known for their
intrest
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interest
and
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in and
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rebelion
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rebellion
to
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against
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this products
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such
as
drugs
or alcohol. At their
party's
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parties
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or
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they are exposed to try one of
this
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these
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from marihuana to
cocoain
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cocoa in
cocaine
.
However
,
get
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getting
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them was more difficult, now that some are legal you can see them at
party's
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parties
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but
also
in stores.
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,
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they are aware of the damage that can cause to their
body's
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bodies
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they have
create
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an addiction because the
drugs
take them out of their reality. There have been
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proven
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that young people experiment
too
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with too
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much
ancity
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anxiety
, depression, stress, and
others
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other
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and to relives
this
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these
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syntoms
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symptoms
they take
this products
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this product
these products
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. Meanwhile, having
this type
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these types
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of
products
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product
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have developed strong addictions that
repercutes
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replicates
their growth and chances to have a better life. No drug
have
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has
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a great outcome
at
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in
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the end, some could be more damaging than other but
at
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in
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the
end
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the body is going to create a need for
this
such
as if it was food. There are some
drugs
that being
ilegal
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illegal
legal
isn't going to change the fact that some people are going to take them,
that's
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and that's
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why there's a big population
involve
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in
this
world.
To sum up
,
controling
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controlling
this
issue has been a topic forever, what the
govermment
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government
could do is
to
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apply
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implement
diffrent
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different
laws so not all the population can have access or
to
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apply
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create filters. The problem is that the legal ones are easy to buy
like
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as
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if they were water.
Nevertheless
, before some were allowed people manage to get them so applying laws and filters could be one solution but creating
kwnoledge
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knowledge
and trying to have
a healthier and happier citizens
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healthier and happier citizens
a healthier and happier citizen
show examples
could help even more.
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