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An increasing number of professionals, such as doctors and teachers, are leaving their own poorer countries. What problem does this cause? What solutions can you suggest to deal with this situation?

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Nowadays,
growing
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 number of salaried professionals are moving from developing countries to developed
nations
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 will discuss what problems it
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 including
loss
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 of expertise and
loss
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 of revenue to the source country.
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 will
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 suggest solutions to these problems including improving infrastructure and salaries. Professionals who go
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 end up leaving a large gap
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 not easy to fill. Consider doctors in developing
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 who move to
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 world for better opportunities. There may not be enough qualified people left to replace them when they leave, which affects the quality of health care for those who
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 behind. Another effect is
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loss
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 of revenue. Governments rely on income taxes to fund their social programs and infrastructure projects. A mass exodus leads to a drop
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 tax
reciepts
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receipts
 which can stunt economic growth and development.
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easy
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 fix for these problems, there are
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some things
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 government can do to reduce or minimize
it
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, governments should invest to improve the infrastructure and
heatlh
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health
 care as
indivduals
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individuals
 want to see that the taxes they are paying are used in
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 ways to improve their quality of life.
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, the payment needs to be structured and proper incentives should be paid whenever necessary.
The salaries
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 are one of the most important economic
fators
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factors
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 movement of professionals as employees find the payment attractive in other countries. In conclusion, more and more people are moving to developed
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 from third-world countries in search of better-paying job opportunities.
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 discussed how
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 exodus is causing issues like
loss
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 of expert minds and
loss
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 of revenue to developing
nations
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essay
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 suggests that solutions to
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 problem are twofold: governments should invest to improve public services and provide competitive salaries.
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