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The table below shows the number of exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia and vice versa.

The table below shows the number of exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia and vice versa.
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The table demonstrates the
amount
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 of
exchange
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students
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 from European
universities
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 to Australian
universities
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 and vice versa. During
this
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 period, the
overall
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number
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 of
exchange
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students
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 from European
universities
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 to
Australia
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 has increased significantly,
while
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 the
overall
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number
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 of
exchange
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students
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 from
Australia
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 to Europe has remained stable.
According to
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 statistics, the
number
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 of
exchange
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students
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 from European
universities
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 to
Australia
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, it found that the
number
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 of French
students
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 decreased from 61 in 2007 to 60 in 2009 and the
number
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 of British
students
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 from 31 in 2007 to 25 in 2009.
In contrast
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, Germany experienced a significant growth from 27
students
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 in 2007 to 63
students
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 in 2009 and the
number
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 of 9Sweden
students
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 increased from 32 in 2007 to 42 in 2009.
On the other hand
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, Ha Lan remained the same
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exchange
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students
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 from 2007 to 2009 Contrary to the above, data of
exchange
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students
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 from
universities
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 in
Australia
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 to Europe indicated that both France and Germany have increased strongly. The
number
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 of
students
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 in France increased from 37 to 58, and the
number
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 of
students
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 in Germany increased from 18 to 26 during
this
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 period.
In contrast
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, the
number
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 of
exchange
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students
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 in the Netherlands decreased significantly from 32 in 2007 to 18 in 2009.
Meanwhile
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 Sweden and
United
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the United
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 Kingdom decreased slightly from 33 in 2007 to 27 in 2009 and from 32 in 2007 to 23 in 2009

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Vocabulary: Replace the words exchange, students, universities, number, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 9 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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