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The table below shows the number of exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia and vice versa.

The table below shows the number of exchange students from universities in Europe to Australia and vice versa.
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The table demonstrates the
amount
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number
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 of
exchange
students
 from European
universities
 to Australian
universities
 and vice versa. During
this
 period, the
overall
number
 of
exchange
students
 from European
universities
 to
Australia
 has increased significantly,
while
 the
overall
number
 of
exchange
students
 from
Australia
 to Europe has remained stable.
According to
 statistics, the
number
 of
exchange
students
 from European
universities
 to
Australia
, it found that the
number
 of French
students
 decreased from 61 in 2007 to 60 in 2009 and the
number
 of British
students
 from 31 in 2007 to 25 in 2009.
In contrast
, Germany experienced a significant growth from 27
students
 in 2007 to 63
students
 in 2009 and the
number
 of 9Sweden
students
 increased from 32 in 2007 to 42 in 2009.
On the other hand
, Ha Lan remained the same
at
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exchange
students
 from 2007 to 2009 Contrary to the above, data of
exchange
students
 from
universities
 in
Australia
 to Europe indicated that both France and Germany have increased strongly. The
number
 of
students
 in France increased from 37 to 58, and the
number
 of
students
 in Germany increased from 18 to 26 during
this
 period.
In contrast
, the
number
 of
exchange
students
 in the Netherlands decreased significantly from 32 in 2007 to 18 in 2009.
Meanwhile
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 Sweden and
United
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 Kingdom decreased slightly from 33 in 2007 to 27 in 2009 and from 32 in 2007 to 23 in 2009
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