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explain why you think your friend would enjoy a camping holiday describe some possible disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with your friend this summer

#friend #holiday #summer
Hope you are doing great! I am writing
this
 letter to offer you some advice with regard to the camping holiday that you are planning for
this
 summer. Summer is the best time to visit Kasol, you will love the weather and the beauty of the mountains.
However
, you might address little showers during the daytime but it will not affect your trip. The little showers from nature would be an addition
of
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 joy. A few demerits you might address is that the localities are not very supportive, It would be difficult in case you require any medical assistance or lose your way
while
 on a hike.
Moreover
, the food choices on the camping location are minimum so I would suggest you carry enough supplements to keep you full. I would love to join you for
this
 adventure, but I have a few commitments which need to be fulfilled first before I go on a holiday. The key reason is that my wife Arshita is going to conceive a baby and I must look after her throughout
this
 year. I hope you will enjoy
this
 amazing adventure. I will see you soon. Warm Regards, Madhur Bathla
Submitted by madhur.bathla on

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