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In some countries, people are purchasing fewer new items and more second-hand goods. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or a negative trend?

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, in some countries,
people
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 tend to buy second-hand goods rather than spend a lot on brand-new
products
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.
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 my point of view, I believe that
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 is a positive trend in a world where resources and facilities are highly limited. First and foremost, at present many forums in the world talk and convey their concerns on sustainability. Our Earth is running out of resources at an increased rate with the growth of the human population.
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, the usage of second-hand items is an environment-friendly and sustainable step towards the betterment of our planet.
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, there are designated markets for used
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 in many developed countries where we can purchase good quality items for a cheaper price.
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, our society has become very competitive and most TV commercials and advertisements encourage
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 to spend their money on brand-new items. But, rather than wasting money to buy something new, second-hand
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 provide various options to choose from without spending much.
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, a few decades back, most
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 with low salaries followed
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 method but, at present the way
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 look at
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 concept has changed positively. Many men and women purchase used goods despite their social status or income.
To conclude
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, in some ,countries
people
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 tend to buy second-hand
products
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 which I believe is a positive trend in many ways. It is not only important for sustainable development but
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 a very progressive initiative to save money and other limited resources like energy and time.
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,
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 are more intelligent and think twice before getting caught in commercials and advertisements done by celebrities.

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