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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people suggest that universities should accept the same number of male and female
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 in all
subjects
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 to promote
gender
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 equality. I believe that the equality of male and female
students
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 should be protected.
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, I disagree that the same number of enrolments of each
gender
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 is an appropriate way. I will illustrate my opinion in the below paragraph. Nowadays, there are still many inequalities happening in our society. One
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,
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 present in many cultures is
gender
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 inequalities.
For instance
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,
women
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 may do the same work but receive
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lower pay, and only a small percentage of
women
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 can reach leadership positions.
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 we should do something to make our society more equal.
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 may include making sure that
women
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 and men have the same opportunity to get a decent education.
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, I do not agree that enrolling the same number of male and female
students
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 in every subject is the right method. It is not the expectation that the interest of any university
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 to be shared equally by
students
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 from each
gender
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.
Women
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 and men usually have different preferences in
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subjects
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 or career choices. From my observation,
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 including technology or computer science are
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preferred by men.
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,
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such
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 as nursing and hospitality have more female student enrolment.
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, if we force universities to accept equal numbers of male and female
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 every subject, some talented
students
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 may be rejected from the course simply because of
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 of
students
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 from the same
gender
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.
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 leads to another unfair situation. In conclusion, I agree that we need to do something to promote
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gender-equal
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a gender-equal
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 society.
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, controlling the
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 proportion at enrolment is not an appropriate way.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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