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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make?. Has this become a positive or negative development? Give a reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Technology
 has changed the way that
people
 communicate with each other.
While
 most
people
 think that
technology
 makes communication more convenient and fast, others think that it has a negative effect on building true relationships between
people
. In my opinion, I believe that
technology
 brings positive effects more than negative
for
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 human society. I will illustrate my reasons in the below paragraph. On the one hand,
technology
 changes our life in many ways, in our daily life, we can call or even make a video chat with our family or friends who
not
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do not
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 live with us. We can send and receive
email
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emails
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, photos and documents immediately as well. Imagine the days without
technology
,
people
 only can contact each other by letter. We easily to lost contact with our
love
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 ones.
Technology
 makes the connection of humans easier, faster and more efficient. Take
myself
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me
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for example
, despite that I immigrate to Australia 5 years ago and all my family members live in Taiwan, I can still talk to them anytime when I want. I can enjoy the beautiful moment and celebrate with my family with
technology
.
On the other hand
, with
technology
people
 can make contact without seeing each other face to face, so
people
 do not need to see each other in real life. Because of that, many
people
 lose their social skills. I saw that
people
 sit
in
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at
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 the same table but play on their own phones without talking in the restaurant many times.
People
 may too focus on the virtual world but forget
those
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the
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people
 who live around them. In conclusion,
technology
 makes our communication easier and more efficient. If we can use it appropriately,
people
 will get
huge
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a huge
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 advance from that.
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