Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad

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to apply for the Bachelor’s

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Computer

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that I am interested in at King Mongkut’s University of Technology Thonburi (

KMUTT

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). Since my younger years, I was curious at finding out how things work and the concepts behind them.

Due to

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particular interest of mine, after my exposure to computers and technological devices, I have come to a realization that

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science

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, which has similar functions, is a tailor-made field for me. Ever since

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I have set my goal to learn

programming

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to program

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and become a well-respected developer in the field of

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science

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. After a long time

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of schools

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Covid

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pandemic which lasted for over 2 years, I passed the matriculation exam with flying

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in 2023.

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, I attended courses and prepared thoroughly for IELTS. After preparing for over a period of three months, I took the exam and passed with a satisfactory band score on October 2023.

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, I took courses on

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General Educational Development (GED) for about 4 months before passing the exam in April with satisfactory scores. In the meantime I am preparing for these two tests, I

also

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attended

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computer

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sciences courses from which I managed to obtain fundamental

knowledge

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of programming languages,

such

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as Python, sequelize databases,

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as MySQL, and markup languages,

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as HTML.

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it is common

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that programming and

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may be tough from

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, the satisfaction I get from overcoming

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challenges

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me to develop more codes.

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, in

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day and age, people,

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having

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easy access to

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the network

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, tend to rely on the

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to find solutions to the problems they are facing.

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, I wish to create programs and apps which may help people relieve some of the burdens in their day-to-day life,

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as ChatGPT.

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, knowing that my existing skills are not enough, I decided to attend

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program in

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to not only enhance

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current skills but

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to obtain

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knowledge

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I am attending for

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bachelor’s

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, I wish to enrich my

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to the fullest extent,

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both backend and

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because I have set my

life-long

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goal to become a DevOps engineer.

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, after finishing the bachelor’s

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, I plan to do an internship in

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to gain

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experience

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whilst attending for the master’s

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, I am considering joining a well-known

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company so that I can gain even more valuable

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and

experience

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, I plan to achieve

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science

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and

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become a DevOps engineer in the work field after getting enough

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. In

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to achieve these goals, after doing the academic preparation, I searched for universities abroad before landing

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Thailand. I chose Thailand with the reason of Thailand,

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neighborhood

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country of Myanmar with similar cultural and religious aspects, which would allow me to adapt to its living style far more easily,

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to being more affordable, than

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in other

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countries.

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searching for universities in Bangkok, I came across the name

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on every website as one of the

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universities. After doing research, I found my interest in

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due to

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its teaching system, research, innovative programs, strong curricula and diversity among students.

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, studying at

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will provide me with the best opportunity and

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to achieve my lifelong goal.

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Topic Vocabulary:

bilingual
multilingual
fluency
communicate
cognitive skills
cultural awareness
opportunities
globalized world
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interact
linguistic abilities
cultural exchange
language proficiency
language barrier
foreign travel
personal growth
academic achievement
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Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad

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In recent times, many people have focused on the negative effects advertising has on children’s health, behaviour and family relationships. Advertising to children should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many countries, people are now living longer than sʼever before. Some people think the are benifits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the adventages of having an ageing population outweigh the adventages.?