Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of studying abroad

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter in
order
to apply for the Bachelor’s
degree
at
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Computer
Science
that I am interested in at King Mongkut’s University of Technology Thonburi (
KMUTT
). Since my younger years, I was curious at finding out how things work and the concepts behind them.
Due to
this
particular interest of mine, after my exposure to computers and technological devices, I have come to a realization that
computer
science
, which has similar functions, is a tailor-made field for me. Ever since
,
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I have set my goal to learn
programming
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and become a well-respected developer in the field of
computer
science
. After a long time
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of schools
due to
Covid
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pandemic which lasted for over 2 years, I passed the matriculation exam with flying
colors
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in 2023.
Subsequently
, I attended courses and prepared thoroughly for IELTS. After preparing for over a period of three months, I took the exam and passed with a satisfactory band score on October 2023.
Furthermore
, I took courses on
the
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General Educational Development (GED) for about 4 months before passing the exam in April with satisfactory scores. In the meantime I am preparing for these two tests, I
also
attended
on
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computer
sciences courses from which I managed to obtain fundamental
knowledge
of programming languages,
such
as Python, sequelize databases,
such
as MySQL, and markup languages,
such
as HTML.
Although
it is common
knowledge
that programming and
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may be tough from
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, the satisfaction I get from overcoming
such
challenges
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me to develop more codes.
Moreover
, in
this
day and age, people,
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easy access to
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, tend to rely on the
internet
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to find solutions to the problems they are facing.
Therefore
, I wish to create programs and apps which may help people relieve some of the burdens in their day-to-day life,
such
as ChatGPT.
However
, knowing that my existing skills are not enough, I decided to attend
Computer
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Science
program in
order
to not only enhance
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current skills but
also
to obtain
further
knowledge
.
While
I am attending for
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bachelor’s
degree
, I wish to enrich my
knowledge
to the fullest extent,
in
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both backend and
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because I have set my
life-long
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goal to become a DevOps engineer.
Hence
, after finishing the bachelor’s
degree
, I plan to do an internship in
order
to gain
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experience
whilst attending for the master’s
degree
.
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, I am considering joining a well-known
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company so that I can gain even more valuable
knowledge
and
experience
.
Finally
, I plan to achieve
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Ph. D in
computer
science
and
thus
become a DevOps engineer in the work field after getting enough
experience
. In
order
to achieve these goals, after doing the academic preparation, I searched for universities abroad before landing
on
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Thailand. I chose Thailand with the reason of Thailand,
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a
neighborhood
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country of Myanmar with similar cultural and religious aspects, which would allow me to adapt to its living style far more easily,
in addition
to being more affordable, than
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countries.
While
searching for universities in Bangkok, I came across the name
KMUTT
on every website as one of the
top ranking
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universities. After doing research, I found my interest in
KMUTT
due to
its teaching system, research, innovative programs, strong curricula and diversity among students.
Therefore
, studying at
KMUTT
will provide me with the best opportunity and
experience
to achieve my lifelong goal.
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  • bilingual
  • multilingual
  • fluency
  • communicate
  • cognitive skills
  • cultural awareness
  • opportunities
  • globalized world
  • job market
  • interact
  • linguistic abilities
  • cultural exchange
  • language proficiency
  • language barrier
  • foreign travel
  • personal growth
  • academic achievement
  • self-confidence
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