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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart gives some information about the outcome of a survey about
people
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’s buying and drinking habits in
coffee
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 and
tea
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 in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide,
Hobart
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and Hobart
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. It had three
part
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parts
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:
bought
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buying
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 fresh
coffee
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,
bought
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buying
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instant
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coffee
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 and
went
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going
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 to a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 in the
last
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 4 weeks.
It is clear that
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people
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 in the five Australian cities went to a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 in
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last
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the last
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 4 weeks were the most.
Therefore
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,
people
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are prefer
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prefer
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 to go to a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or
tea
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 rather than bought fresh
coffee
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 and
instant
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coffee
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.And the
people
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 who prefer to
bought
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buy
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 fresh
coffee
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is
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are
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 the smallest , among
three
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the three
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 of them. From the
people
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bought
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who bought
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 fresh
coffee
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, the percentage of city residents
were
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was
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 about under 45 in Sydney and Melbourne. And 35% of the residents
is
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are
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 in
other
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the other
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 three cities. It is
also
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 clear that the percentage of
people
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 who went to a
cafe
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 for
coffee
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 or
tea
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were
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was
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 almost bigger than
bought
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buying
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instant
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coffee
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.It came up to over 60% in Sydney,
Melbource
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Melbourne
 and Hobart. But in Adelaide, the
people
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 who bought
instant
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coffee
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was
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were
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 slightly extra than went to a
cafe
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 or
tea
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, instant, cafe, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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