The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives some information about the outcome of a survey about
people
’s buying and drinking habits in
coffee
and
tea
in Sydney, Melbourne, Brisbane, Adelaide,
Hobart
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and Hobart
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. It had three
part
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parts
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:
bought
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buying
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fresh
coffee
,
bought
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buying
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instant
coffee
and
went
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going
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to a
cafe
for
coffee
in the
last
4 weeks.
It is clear that
people
in the five Australian cities went to a
cafe
for
coffee
or
tea
in
last
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the last
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4 weeks were the most.
Therefore
,
people
are prefer
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prefer
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to go to a
cafe
for
coffee
or
tea
rather than bought fresh
coffee
and
instant
coffee
.And the
people
who prefer to
bought
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buy
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fresh
coffee
is
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are
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the smallest , among
three
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the three
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of them. From the
people
bought
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who bought
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fresh
coffee
, the percentage of city residents
were
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was
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about under 45 in Sydney and Melbourne. And 35% of the residents
is
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are
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in
other
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the other
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three cities. It is
also
clear that the percentage of
people
who went to a
cafe
for
coffee
or
tea
were
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was
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almost bigger than
bought
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buying
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instant
coffee
.It came up to over 60% in Sydney,
Melbource
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Melbourne
and Hobart. But in Adelaide, the
people
who bought
instant
coffee
was
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were
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slightly extra than went to a
cafe
or
tea
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, instant, cafe, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • coffee
  • tea
  • buying habits
  • drinking habits
  • Australian cities
  • consumption
  • respondents
  • regular
  • participants
  • levels
  • observed
  • popular
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