Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Other argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

Some
people
allow themselves to face
such
a bad situation, like a deficient
job
or lack of money.
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, The others prefer to solve the problems to get a better
condition
.
This
essay agrees that it is more value able if we address the problem to have a dream
job
and earn much money. a few
people
does
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not matter to deal with poor
condition
. It is not a big deal as long as they have a
job
even
by
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a low salary. They use spiritual
perspective
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to understand their life.
For example
, Accepting the bad
condition
will show their
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and gratefulness, rather than
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complain
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and they think that complaining will make
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angary
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.
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, When they want to resign from
unsatisfactory
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an unsatisfactory
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job
, they are afraid that they cannot find a better
work place
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and cannot go back to the previous institution. So
that
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, it will make their situation harder than before.
On the other hand
,
people
who like challenges will take the risk to be accepted in
the
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dream
job
with a good salary. Internet will
be help
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full to
the
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people
who are seeking
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job
. They can select the types of
job
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jobs
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with
the
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high income. By working in
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a satisfactory
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job
, they evolve their skills and find more
opportunity
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to level up their career.
However
, to get a better
job
, sometimes, we need to upgrade our skills. It makes you
to
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spend
much
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money to take the course, but it is still possible to achieve.
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up
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with
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, It does not matter to deal with
bad
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the bad
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condition
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, but it will be better if you improve the situation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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