The art, including art ,music and theatre are considered to be important in society. Do you think the art still have a place amoungst our modern lifestyles? Should the art be included in the school curriculum

What is

art

?

Art

is the various branches of creative

actively

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activities

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such

as painting,

music

, photography, literature and dance. Nowadays the concept of

art

including

music

,dance, literature and theatre are very important in our modern society,

need

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and need

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to be considered and included in the school curriculum for better learning

skill

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.I believe

this

is an appropriate learning

skill

in schools which will help the growing

children

learn more and be creative

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with ,having a good,conducive ,

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and

noise free

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environment for learning is very important for

children

,having a colourful classroom ,hall with diagrams of different animals and

things

that will help their learning

skill

.moreso ,bringing

art

in

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the curriculum has great benefits it will bring out the

children

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great learning

skill

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,

they

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and they

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will be able to know their abilities .

However

,creative activity and learning

,

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is a way of making them have long time memory.

for

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examples

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,in a class where the

children

are been taught with diagrams,coloured objects,billboard and posters ,

this

children

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tends

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to pay more attention and be more interested in

things

they can see,feel and touch ,

this

help

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things

stay longer in their memory.

Furthermore

,when

art

is included in

curriculum

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the curriculum

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and

this

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these

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children

tends

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to learn and are able to know what they can do ,they will be able to engage in various branches of creative

activities

such

as entertainment which is a way of relieving stress and

mental

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the mental

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health of people.

Also

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music

, watching movies, photography,

craft

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and craft

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work of different images and objects.It

promote

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creativities,

develop

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develops

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their self -esteem and it

also

provide

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job opportunities in future .

Moreover

,looking at some

school

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schools

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and

belief

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beliefs

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,they still go against

art

activities

and work ,some believe it will have some negative impact on

children

growing up,that they will

loose

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lose

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concentration and get distracted with the whole

art

creativities but if they are well

guilded

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guided

and

their

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is

timetable

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the timetable

a timetable

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for when to go for

art

learning

things

will be perfect because

art

activities

are very important in our society today and in future. In conclusion,

Art

including

music

,theatre,dance photography and

lot

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more should be added and encouraged in schools to improve more learning skills and creative

activities

now and in future .