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Environmental problem such as pollution and climate variations are increasing now days. The government have taken measures at global level but they got only few solution. Why is it so? And how can this problem be solved?

#pollution #climate #variations #government #measures #level
These days pollution and climate change are the considerable challenge that the countries are facing,
although
 countries have made many decisions about
this
 issue but only
afew
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a few
 of them are functional. Now
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the cause of
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the government's
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 failure and
then
 talk about practical solutions. I believe that it is hard and difficult to find the proper and practical solution to confront the variety of
pollutions
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 because so many factories should be closed and
then
 after that lots of
labor
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 will lose their job and
this
 will cause more and more problems for governments. In my opinion,
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 decision is cultural work in
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society and
then
 little by little people will change their
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 and mindsets.
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 they use
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 plastics and
instead
 will use
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 materials which
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recycle
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 capabilities. In conclusion, I think it is not only the government's responsibility to make decisions to
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 the environment, but
also
 all the people who live on the
earth
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 planet
,
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 should take care of
this
 beautiful planet for
next
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the next
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 generation.
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