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,Should education and health care be free of charge and funded by the government, or should it be responsibilities of the people to pay for these services

#education #health #care #charge #government #responsibilities #people #services
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Education
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 and health care should be funded by the
government
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,
this
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 will enable both the lower-
class
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citizens
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 and the middle
class
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 to get a
sound
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education
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,
Also
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 reduces the level of illiteracy and criminality in the
country
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Firstly
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,
Education
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 and health care should be funded by the
government
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,
this
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 will enable both the lower and middle-
class
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citizens
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 to get a
sound
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education
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, in the case of
education
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, parents know the importance of training their children in higher institutions, but
due to
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 a lack of funds,
this
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 made many children, mostly the lower
class
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 not to gain the benefit of
education
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, but if the
government
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 will be able to intervene by implementing free
education
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, it will enable most of the lower
class
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 and All of the middle
class
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 to have a good and
sound
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education
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.
Secondly
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,
education
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 and healthcare should be funded by the
government
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, because it will help to reduce the high level of illiteracy and criminality in the
country
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for example
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, if
education
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 is free which can be afforded by all
citizens
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 being it a high-
class
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, middle-
class
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, and lower-
class
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, unity will be achieved, good communication will be achieved,
Also
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 nuisance in the society will be abolished because most children will be spending most of there times studying. Which will help in creating a developed
country
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. In conclusion, it would be better if the
government
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 will be able to implement free
education
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 which will enable all
citizens
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 to enjoy a good and
sound
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education
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, to build up a developed
country
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.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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