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In some countries, young people are encouraged to look or travel for a year between finishing high school and starting university studies. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for young people who decide to do this.

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Some countries do support youths to go
for
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 vacation after graduation from secondary school in order to help them ease the stress of school.
This
 has advantages and disadvantages on them. Youths can choose to travel after graduation from secondary school to visit family and friends,
this
 will help the individual learn new things about life, during the vacation, the individual might try to work in order to gather
money
 within that one year and
also
 process his or her admission into the university, by so doing the little job will make the individual save enough
money
 and it will
also
 help the individual to appreciate the parents. When the individual chooses to visit family, the kind of job those people the individual visited can
also
 open his eyes to choose
carrier
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a carrier
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 in the university, going
for
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on
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excursion
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an excursion
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 will open the individual eyes to appreciate nature more. The disadvantages can be that the individual exposure to
money
 via working will make him or her
loose
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lose
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 interest in furthering their education because they now work and can buy anything they want with
money
,
money
 making exposes the individual to
life
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 enjoyments.
Also
 travelling can make the individual meet new friends that will introduce him or her to
bad
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a bad
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habit
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habits
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 like smoking,
drinking
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and drinking
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 alcoholic substances and
there by
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thereby
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 making the individual
loose
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lose
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 interest in going to
the
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apply
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university. In conclusion,travelling after secondary is really nice,
working
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and working
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 after secondary is
also
 good. The individual needs to be sensitive in order not to allow the disadvantages
affect
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to affect
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 him or her.
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