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Some people believe that it is parents who teach children to recycle waste. While others feel schools are more responsible. Discuss both views. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

#people #parents #children #waste #schools
One of the social concerns today relates to the responsibility of
schools
 and families in teaching
children
 to recycle
waste
.
While
 it is widely believed that it is
parents
 who teach
children
 to recycle
waste
schools
 are more responsible, others believe. In my opinion, it is
parents
 who teach
children
 to recycle
waste
. On the one hand, it is argued by some it is
parents
 who teach
children
 to recycle
waste
. The main reason is that they believe that
parents
 are people, whom the
children
 spent the most time with them,
therefore
 they should be the person who teaches
children
 about recycling
waste
 to protect the environment and protect our life It is
also
 possible to say that family have to be in charge of educating younger generation protect the environment.
According
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science research, the scientist shows that family teaching is always more memorable with the
children
 than other teachings just because the
parents
 are the most credible person with them.
On the other hand
, it is strongly believed
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that
schools
 are more responsible in teaching younger recycle
waste
. People often have
this
 opinion because they always think teachers were trained and paid for educating
children
 and
parents
 aren’t. A second point is that today, the parent ‘s jobs seem is making them too busy and they haven’t enough time to teach
children
 to recycle
waste
 so teachers and
schools
 have to be who have more responsibility. A particularly good example here is my uncle is ready to pay a large amount of money to give his
children
 to a boarding school because he really doesn’t have enough time to teach his kids and he hopes that they will have a good education in that school and will be taken care carefully, that he can’t give his
children
. In conclusion, nowadays some
parents
 believe that it is they who teach
children
 to recycle
waste
while
 others feel
schools
 are more responsible Personally, I tend to believe that
parents
 should take care more and give their
children
 knowledge about recycling
waste
 and protecting the environment.
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