In the future, it will be harder to live on Earth than before, because it believed that people think they should spend money for researching another planet where they move on, such as Mars. I totally disagree with this opinion

In the future, it will be harder to live on Earth than before, because it
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that
people
think they should spend money
for researching
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another planet where they move on,
such
as Mars. I totally disagree with
this
opinion. There are some reasons why I disagree with
this
living
hardly
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. First of all, we can see that inhabitants live safely and peacefully. Some
people
think that water will
have
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finished in the future .
However
, it has solutions.
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,
on
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Earth has a lot of facilities for
people
living
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easily, because of technologies and robots. They help and support
people
in any kind
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and works
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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