The breakthrough in medical sciences are by far the most significant advances in the world society over the last two centuries. Discuss this statement and give your opinion
Most
people
consider that the administration should finance oscillation, occupation and musicfor
teenagers Correct your spelling
music for
while
another part believes that these activities
should be provide
with money by businessmen or by their Change the verb form
be provided
parents
. This
essay will discuss both these points of view and argue in favor
of the letter.
Almost all Change the spelling
favour
people
agree that the local government should pay extracurricular
Change preposition
for extracurricular
activities
for instance
making music, arts and dance therefore
they think that if authorities take on this
issue, it will open new courses
which will engage these activities
. Most children
attend these classes since they are public as a consequence
it is the most significant advantage. All over the world
no one is financially equal thereby we cannot discover all Add a comma
,world
children
who have talent thus
if they are public, most children
will take course
.
Some Add an article
the course
a course
people
believe that families or private ownerships should ensure financial of courses
although
it is damage to their budgets, some people
superior this
way than public way. In fact
we know that Add a comma
,fact
parents
and private sectors have capitalized extracurricular
Change preposition
on extracurricular
activities
in Australia since 1989 thereby almost 89 percent children
take Change preposition
of children
courses
. Most parents
choose this
method as they have a chance to choose any course consequence it is most
important edge and Correct article usage
the most
also
if private businesses finance these activities
, they will improve education at the courses
. In my view families and private businesses should pay tuition fees of
Change preposition
for
courses
as I think that some parents
want to choose course locations, teachers, meals and also
native
language.
In conclusion, most Correct pronoun usage
their native
people
have different thoughts while
we generally divide 7 o parts therefore
first
part Correct article usage
the first
consider
that local authorities pay Change the verb form
considers
courses
payment, Change preposition
for courses
second
part Correct article usage
the second
believe
that Change the verb form
believes
children
's parents
or private businesses should finance music, dance and arts
lessons. On the whole, I guess Change the noun form
art
parents
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