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consider that the administration should finance oscillation, occupation and

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agree that the local government should pay

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making music, arts and dance

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if they are public, most

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believe that families or private ownerships should ensure financial of

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we know that

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in Australia since 1989 thereby almost 89 percent

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take

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as I think that some

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want to choose course locations, teachers, meals and

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have different thoughts

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payment,

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that

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or private businesses should finance music, dance and

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lessons. On the whole, I guess

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and private!