In Their Advertising Businesses Nowadays Emphasise That Their Products Are New In Some Way

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Recently, many
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claimed they have something new than others. In
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will explain why the topic becomes famous, whether it is a positive or negative development. Development is happening in all sectors. The sellers say that their
products
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have some new improvements and want to be unique in their
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advertisement
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. Nowadays, skincare is very famous all around the world. Many
products
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are released they are named
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day cream, night cream, eye cream, face wash, face serum, etc. The brands said they have new ingredients which are contained in their
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,
one
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brand put nail secrete to fix scars caused by
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.
On the other hand
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,
one
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company says they put orange extract to fix dull faces.
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is a positive development because what
people
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need is different from each other, and
people
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can choose what they need most with many brands in the market.
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, some
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do not have well education about skincare, they do not know which is the best for them. They just believe what they see in the
advertisement
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and do not learn more about what ingredients they contain. For illustrate, a person has a big problem with
pimples
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, and she sees the
advertisement
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for a
product
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that hire a gorgeous model that show a big change after using the
product
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with new chemical on their
product
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, actually, the ingredient is the same as what she used before different percentage, she uses 20% of active chemical, but the
product
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in the
advertisement
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has 50%. But in the end, she gets the worst result. Actually, she just needs a less active chemical to cure her
pimples
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, but because of the
advertisement
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and lack of information, she gets an unpleasant result.
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, the brand says they have the best
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for
pimples
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, but the active chemicals are too high to get the maximum result for curing the
pimples
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. It means what she sees in
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advertisement
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it is not fit
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her. More
products
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in the markets, make us more wise to choose the right
one
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. In my honest view, nothing in
products
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is really new. Everything is discovered before; what we use in
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now is developments from previous
products
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. The companies just change the amount and sometimes get new sources that contain the same chemicals.
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trend is positive because
people
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can choose which
one
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is the best for them, but
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business can be negative because some
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just believe what they hear and see from advertisements without learning more about it.

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