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The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.

The bar chart gives information about the number of car journeys into the city centre made by residents and non-residents.
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The given bar chart clearly illustrates information about the
number
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 of
car
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 trips into the city
center
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centre
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 by
residents
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 and
non-
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residents
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 from 1996 to 2005.
Overall
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, it is obvious that the
number
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 of
car
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journeys
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 by
residents
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 experienced a downward trend,
while
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 the
number
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 of
car
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journeys
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 by
non-
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residents
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 showed an upward trend.
However
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, both
figures
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 had some fluctuations throughout the period. In 1996, the
number
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 of
car
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journeys
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 by
residents
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 was about 10000 cases, being higher than the
non-
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residents
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'
figures
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.
Then
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, it continued with little fluctuations between 1997 and 1999.
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, the
figures
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 by
residents
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 experienced a rapid decline in 2000, introducing parking meters into the city
center
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centre
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.
Then
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, it showed a steady trend until 2005.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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 of
car
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journeys
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 by
non-
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residents
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 was lower than the
residents
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'
figures
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 during 1996-1999. After introducing parking meters into the city
center
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centre
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,
non-
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residents
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'
figures
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 exceeded the
residents
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'
figures
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 by approximately 3000 cases in 2000.
However
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, it shrank significantly in 2003 when Westgate
streets
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Streets
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 and Park Lane closed.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, car, residents, non-residents, journeys, figures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • trend analysis
  • residents
  • non-residents
  • urban planning
  • traffic management
  • regulate
  • measures
  • impact
  • increase
  • decrease
  • compare
  • explore
  • evaluate
  • potential
  • journey
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