The supplied pie chart enumerates the comparison of the online shopping for selling section in Cabada from 2005 to 2010.

The supplied pie chart enumerates the comparison of the online shopping for selling section in Cabada from 2005 to 2010.
The supplied pie chart enumerates the comparison of the online shopping for selling section in Cabada from 2005 to 2010. in general, all of the sectors are
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distributed
evenly,
however
,
it is clear that
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electronics and
appliance
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was one of the most popular in both
years
. As can be seen, there are four types of sales.First of all,sales of electronics and
appliance
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were the highest percentage of over one in three in 2005.
Although
, 5
years
later
this
figure had decreased and went down from 35% to thirty
per
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cent.The share of home furnishing met the same fate and fell from 25% to a small minority(15%) in 5
years
period.There is
also
an indicator of video games that had 18% in 2005 and was rising over the
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of 5% and reached almost a quarter in 2010.The Sector of food and beverage revealed the largest improvement from about one in four(22%) to 32 per cent,
furthermore
, it went from third place in 2005 to
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first in 2010.
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