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People continue to recommit crimes even after being penalised for their wrongdoings. Why do you think this happens? How can crime be stopped?

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There is a controversial perspective heating a debate over the fact that people continue to recommit felonies after being punished for their bad behaviour.
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this
 pressing problem. Without a shadow of a doubt, there are various elements leading to
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 circumstance. One of those reasons are those bad influential content creators publishing bad types of content on social media like Facebook,Youtube,
Tiktok
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 watching his clips there were
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While
 the factors of offenders recommitting offences are widely acknowledged, the solutions to deal with these types of problems are
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this
 tricky problem.To filter those inappropriate contents the government should control videos published
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at some point reduced his impact on the community. In conclusion, there are a wealth of reasons which lead to recommitting violations, so we need to find equivalent resolutions for addressing
this
 urgent issue.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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