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Some people think learning history in school is important. Others think learning subjects more relevant to life is important. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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For as long as there have been schools,
people
 have debated what should be taught in them. Nowadays, with economic troubles creating additional pressure
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people
, there is a call for school curriculums to include more practical
subjects
 and less of the arts and humanities.
This
 essay will look at both sides of the argument and conclude that
subjects
 like
history
 should continue to be taught. In the modern era,
people
 often clamour for changes to school curriculums and the range of
subjects
 is continuously changing
according to
 social demands.
People
 now ask that their children are taught practical
subjects
 that can help them in their lives, and
this
 is a very reasonable request. In the twenty-first century, science and technology are booming fields and so these areas are important for young
people
 to study in order that they may one day contribute and get a good job.
However
, to include these
subjects
 at the expense of traditional ones like
history
 is misguided.
History
 is important for a number of reasons. Perhaps one of the most overlooked aspects of studying
history
 is that it teaches critical thinking that many
people
 simply do not learn
elsewhere
 in life.
It is clear that
people
 who have studied
history
 are able to discern what is and isn’t true far more easily than others. By critically assessing historical sources, they may seem to be learning an arcane skill, but in
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 they are learning something
that is
 important in life. Particularly in an era of social media and “fake news,” being able to pick apart truth and lies is increasingly important. In conclusion,
history
 may seem less important than more practical
subjects
, but the underlying skills taught in
this
 subject are very useful for
people
 in the modern world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • historical events
  • insights
  • past civilizations
  • contextual understanding
  • critical thinking skills
  • cultural awareness
  • practical challenges
  • modern world
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial independence
  • creativity
  • innovation
  • balance
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