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The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005

The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005
The supplied map gives data on the developments that were at the seaside resort of Templeton from 1990 to 2005.
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, it can be that over the years there was considerable changes with demolished houses,new buildings and a new
railway
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. It is
importent
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important
 to notice, that in 1990 a residential area was much more greener with a lot of trees and houses.Over the
fifteen year
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fifteen-year
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period
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,period
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 there
was
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were
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 huge improvements and the first thing to notice is removing of houses
in
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on
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 the
south-west
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southwest
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 side and
constructing
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construction
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a
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of a
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new supermarket with two buildings under it.A
continue
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continuation
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 of a
railway
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 was made from east to west and beside
this
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railway
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,railway
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 a modern factory was made in the south-east part.The school did not change the location but near to
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this
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,this
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 an airport
was occurred
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occurred
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.It can be seen that a ferry took place
in
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on
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 the east side of
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railway
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the railway
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 and opposite
of
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apply
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this
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 in the
north-west
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northwest
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a
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apply
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three
boiuldings
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buildings
building
was
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were
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 built.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "gives" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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