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Some people think that young criminals should receive the same punishments as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed by some people that equal punishments ought to be executed
criminals
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 regardless of their
age
. I mostly disagree with
this
 suggestion because the young
do
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 not
be
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aware of
crimes
 and penalties as the old do and they have more tendencies to
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due to
 their
age
.
Firstly
, most of
young
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the young
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 people do not know and recognize about
crimes
 and their sentences. They may do some improper
actions
 without conscious and knowing to be blamed.
For example
, they may be used in smuggling
due to
 their
affectionate
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 or they may be blamed in a car crash owing to their distracting riding on a bike.
Hence
, they are often innocent or
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unaware
in
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 crime incidents because they are not noticed
about
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 laws and criminal
actions
.
Thus
, they should not be evaluated as same as adults in the courts.
Secondly
, the young are prone to commit flaws as much as the old.
Due to
 their youth energy, they do not recognize issues in their
actions
 and they do not foresee their wrongdoings’ responsibilities which correspond
in
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 the law terminology. To illustrate that, many young people do not avoid
to
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using drugs at least one time in order to prove their feat to their friends.
In addition
, they do not fear to be in
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 with groups to show their loyalty to their neighbours. Unfortunately, these examples are counted as
crimes
 and they may be imprisoned. Looking
their
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 cases in terms of their
age
 and experience, they reserve several
chances
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 in their lives.
Thus
, they should be privileged in the laws. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied with
this
 suggestion.
Although
 some riot acts may be behaved like
as
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adults in the courts
such
 as terrorist
actions
 and involving massacres, in my opinion, young people’s
crimes
 ought to be assessed differently than adults
due to
 their
age
 and low awareness about the
crimes
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