Some people think that young criminals should receive the same punishments as adults. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is believed by some people that equal punishments ought to be executed
criminals
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for criminals
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regardless of their
age
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. I mostly disagree with
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suggestion because the young
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not
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aware of
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and penalties as the old do and they have more tendencies to
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due to
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their
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Firstly
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, most of
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the young
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people do not know and recognize about
crimes
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and their sentences. They may do some improper
actions
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without conscious and knowing to be blamed.
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, they may be used in smuggling
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their
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or they may be blamed in a car crash owing to their distracting riding on a bike.
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, they are often innocent or
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unaware
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of
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crime incidents because they are not noticed
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laws and criminal
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.
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, they should not be evaluated as same as adults in the courts.
Secondly
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, the young are prone to commit flaws as much as the old.
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their youth energy, they do not recognize issues in their
actions
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and they do not foresee their wrongdoings’ responsibilities which correspond
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the law terminology. To illustrate that, many young people do not avoid
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using drugs at least one time in order to prove their feat to their friends.
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, they do not fear to be in
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with groups to show their loyalty to their neighbours. Unfortunately, these examples are counted as
crimes
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and they may be imprisoned. Looking
their
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at their
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cases in terms of their
age
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and experience, they reserve several
chances
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in their lives.
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, they should be privileged in the laws. In conclusion, causes and examples can be multiplied with
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suggestion.
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some riot acts may be behaved like
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adults in the courts
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as terrorist
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and involving massacres, in my opinion, young people’s
crimes
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ought to be assessed differently than adults
due to
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their
age
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and low awareness about the
crimes
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