You have discovered a lot of rubbish in a lake near where you live. In the past, the lake had always been clean. Write a letter to the local council. In the letter: · describe the type of rubbish that you saw in the lake · explain where you think the waste has come from · suggest what the council should do about the problem

Dear Sir, I am writing to inform you that I
have
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unhappy about the recent visit to Humber
Lake
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. I am a regular visitor to the
lake
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in summer, enjoying the beautiful scenery and spending my weekends
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along
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with my family. Recently, I have found a lot of garbage floating near the west side of the
lake
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and causing a rotten smell in the nearby area
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I would like to bring
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to your immediate attention. I can find more plastic cups and bottles which come from the nearby
shop
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that has recently opened during the summer. Even though
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the
shop
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provides excellent services to people coming to the
lake
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by providing refreshment drinks, since there are not enough garbage bins near the
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people throw the waste into the
lake
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. If the city council install more garbage bins around the
shop
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and keeps advertisement boards about littering in the
lake
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would help a lot to overcome
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issue.
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, recommending the
shop
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switch to paper products would be the ideal long-term solution. I would appreciate your immediate attention on
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matter. Thanking you in advance. Yours faithfully, David

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grammar
Improve grammar and fix small errors. Change 'I have unhappy' to 'I am unhappy' and revise long sentences.
structure
Split into clear paragraphs: opening; rubbish seen and where; origin of waste; what the council should do; closing.
style
Use simple, short sentences and clear words to explain ideas.
content
Be precise about where the rubbish comes from and keep to one idea per sentence.
task achievement
The letter has a clear aim to inform the council and ask for action.
tone
The tone is polite and formal, suitable for an official letter.
content
It mentions practical steps the council can take, like more bins and signs.
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