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The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities. Summarize this information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.
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The supplied graph provides information about average monthly temperatures in London, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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while
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 the table illustrates the total
hours
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 per year of sunshine in these cities.
Overall
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, it can be easily apparent that
Sydney
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’s figure is comparatively higher than others
whereas
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 in New
York
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 the number of
hours
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 shining is more than
London
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in London
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 and
Sydney
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 ones. Getting back to details,
Sydney
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’s data started from just over 25 degrees during January
then
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 dropped to roughly 15%, before getting back to approximately the same proportion
at the end
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 of the year.
On the other hand
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, the figures of New
York
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 and London experienced relatively equal changes throughout the year albeit opposite
Sydney
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 their temperature goes up during the summer. In terms of the sunshine, New
York
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 and
Sydney
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 have the highest annual number of
hours
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 with 2,473 and 2535
hours
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 respectively. London’s data is considerably lower than those with less than 1200
hours
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.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words york, sydney, hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average monthly temperature
  • temperature fluctuations
  • range
  • significant differences
  • average number of hours of sunshine per year
  • highlight
  • relate
  • patterns
  • comparisons
  • major cities
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